Akinyinka, much improvement over your original version. However, I still think you need to work on the lineweight for the memorial design part, try using four to five line widths, e.g. (000, 00, 1, 2, and 3), and if the firm is only looking for a designer, cut back to only two pages of your art work and remove the word “art” from the cover and inside page.
Best of luck to you.
